The pitch: https://youtu.be/PeJG8De7maM
Reflection: Unfortunately, I didn't get a chance to do the first elevator pitch because I was sick with bronchitis and my voice sounded terrible. However, I listened to the advice Dr. Pryor gave us, looked through everyone in this group’s videos and was able to get some ideas from those. I think the most important take-away is being exciting enough to convince someone that your idea is worth it while keeping everything short, sweet, and to the point. Since this is my first time doing this, I’m looking forward to seeing what you guys think!
I like the idea you presented in your elevator pitch, and don't worry, I didn't get to do the first elevator pitch either! I think your presenting skills were great and you had good body language and confidence. The only thing I can think of changing is possibly just the camera angle so it looks like you are talking to someone one-on-one!
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ReplyDeleteI think you nailed it! The hardest thing I had to deal with was trying to organized by ideas so the description and solution are clear and it appeared that you put some good planning effort into your pitch. It also seemed that you practiced or are comfortable communicating formally. The angle is the only thought that went through my head in terms of things to critique. It obviously wouldn't be an issue in the real world but for the purpose of the assignment it would have looked a bit better from a straight shot like Adam suggested.
With this being your first pitch, I think it was done really well. You are a little under the 90 second mark, but you have all the information you need to convey your business idea, so I wouldn't add too much to it for the last pitch. The only thing you could maybe work on is a more enticing hook, but overall the pitch is well executed and interesting.
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ReplyDeleteGood job with your first elevator pitch. You gave a lot of good information and explained your product well. My only suggestions would be: try to slow down when talking and include more emotion; instead of telling about your year in school and major, lead with a stimulating hook. I tried to improve on some of these same points in my second elevator pitch. Great work!
Really enjoyed your video. You explained everything about the idea in a really comprehensive way. I think you did a good job making yourself easily relatable to. I thought Grant was correct in pointing out that ifg you slow down your words may stick better. But all in all great.
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